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EX2 : Fishlock Wood (standard:drama, 1773 words) | |||
Author: red1hols | Added: Sep 27 2003 | Views/Reads: 3398/2338 | Story vote: 0.00 (0 votes) |
My go at the TOF Project. Writing like this is so alien to me and I really need your feedback! | |||
Click here to read the first 75 lines of the story Wood. The women catch up with the man. One stands scowling, her hands are tucked under the opposing armpits, her shoulders hunched and her chin rests on her chest. The other pauses and points her flashlight at the man's feet. There is a smile and then a gentle, rhythmical rise and fall of her shoulders. The man wags a finger in her direction before stomping off down the path. Inspector Bill Walker grabs at his phone and stabs it with a malicious finger. One mention of Fishlock Wood and the lure of his bed and the warmth of his inviting wife are set aside. Within seconds he is dressing, making more calls as he pulls on whatever comes to hand. The three intruders reach the stile that marks the boundary of Fishlock Woods. In the observation Centre, Eddie selects a new camera and adjusts his view. The coat-hugging woman is shaking her head violently and stamps one foot. The other woman edges forward and attempts the stile. The man reaches out and grabs the woman; the woman turns and slaps his face. The momentum of the blow causes the man's head to snap sideways and the woman to lurch forward. She wobbles for a few seconds before falling upon the man causing both to disappear from view amongst the soggy undergrowth. Under the patrol car's courtesy light Constables Watts and Pickle, spread out the map and rub their chins in unison. Like a good music hall act, they keep perfect timing as the scratch their head, rub the back of their necks and scour the map. Suddenly, and still in perfect harmony, they bring forefingers down on a splodge of green. Watts folds the map and Pickle coaxes the van forward. The coat-hugger turns her back on her fallen companions and has her head cowed. Her shoulders gently quake. She makes no move to help the other two as they rise from the muddy ground. No assistance is offered to their half-hearted attempts to brush off vegetation and mud. Nor does she follow as they inelegantly conquer the stile and cross into Fishlock Wood. Bill Walker has reached the motorway. His car flashes past the latest batch of vehicles to be disgorged from the ferries. White-knuckled hands grip the wheel; his eyes flash as they scan the road for potential hazards. At junction 12, he expertly overtakes the Animal Protection Squad convoy and turns his car towards rural darkness. There is an impasse at the stile. Coat-hugger is on one side with her two companions gesture frantically for her to follow from the other. The man turns to the other woman and throws back his head. The woman looks down at the floor and holds up her hand flatly. The man raises his own hands to the heavens, fingers mimicking the branches of the gnarled oak. Constable Pickle brakes hard, causing tyres to scream and the van to fishtail. There is a metallic crunch as he selects reverse gear and the engine whines at being forced to go backwards at speed. Pickles stops and spurs the van to veer off down a narrow country lane. The van obliges, spitting up granite chippings as it goes. The two inside the stile turn away from coat-hugger and walk deeper into the wood. Eddie selects a new camera. The two walk around a large Hawthorn, halt, and look back the way they just came. Eddie checks on coat-hugger. She is sat upon the stile. Eddie cranes his neck to the window and strains his eyes toward the lane. Two patrol cars, bellowing clouds of white light turn into the far end of the lane. Flashes of blue strike out from the cloud of white as the large Range Rovers skim first one hedgerow and then the other. Inside the motorised light shows, uniformed policemen hang on grimly to avoid bouncing into the roof. Coat-hugger sits up. Her head jerks first one way, then the other. Her eyes are wide and glow an eerie green on Eddie's image enhanced screen. Coat-hugger swings the beam of her flashlight around. Left then right, up then down desperately trying to overcome threatening darkness. Eddie checks the other two. They are still where he left them. As he watches, they become three again. Inspector Walker has caught up with Watts and Pickle. The two cars hurtle down the narrow lane. Rabbits spin and dart into hedgerows. Vermin scurry into drains. An old fox gives a single disinterested glance and saunters back across the field. Bill Walker looks in his mirrors and notes other lights behind him. Watts spots flashes of blue ahead and lets out a large sigh. Eddie changes cameras anticipating where the three are headed, but is left looking at a patch of empty wood. He frantically flicks from camera to camera until he locates them at the old badger set. They are stood in a circle. All their mouths are moving at once. All arms are being waved, even coat-huggers. The lane at the end of the footpath is full of lights. Car doors open to spew out Inspector Walker, Constables Watts and Pickle, Animal Protection Inspectors and eight other assorted policemen. Over a dozen flashlights challenge the darkness. Doors are left swinging in the breeze as the crowd rushes down the path towards Fishlock Wood. Eddie watches a frantic melee of flashlight beams as they hurry towards Fishlock Wood, nods then turns his attention back to the screen. The man is on his knees with one arm down the Badger's Set. The two women are bent forward, eyes fixed upon the entrance. The man withdraws his arm, takes a flashlight and plays the light across the mound of earth. Slowly he draws himself upright and makes a couple of paces to his right before kneeling again. The women rush to get a better view as once again his arm disappears into the set. Inspector Walker trots down the path at the head of the blue-clad cavalry. The stile proves no hindrance as the trees of Fishlock Wood blank out the mass of flashlights. The man pauses and looks up. The women spin round. Inspector Walker strides forward, grinning. The Animal Protection Inspectors form a little huddle, shrugging and shaking their heads. Watts and Pickles are forgotten as the other policemen stride forward, collect up the three intruders and march them back towards the lane. The vehicles swallow up their charges then drive off. The police rush to exit the lane. The Animal Protection Inspectors turn off and head up a pitted track to the barn. Eddie watches them approach, turns on the kettle and produces a tin of biscuits. Fishlock Wood returns to pre-historic, natural darkness. The last Black Kites roost in the tallest Elm. One sits on the nest, the other on a branch. Neither knows nor care that Inspector Walker has at last got his man. Tweet
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